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.a dream of birth

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Never mind the fact that I couldn't find the link between the title and the picture, since all you asked were a composition critic.

I kept having this feeling that you have TOO MUCH white hanging on the left. Granted the fact that the subjects were on the right, it does come across as a bit like "staring right into a world of blanks" and all...

The staff the girl/pseudo-girl (I wouldn't know; heck, the full-figure person!) held poked RIGHT through the dude's eyes?

Your rendering of the wings were more refined and beautiful on the right and - perhaps - a - bit - too - rushed - as my eyes went inwards of the picture.

The clothing art is fantastic, but as dreamy stuff goes, it's a bit *too* fanciful if impractical at times, as was with some of your later works. But hey, I shouldn't be commenting on this right? It's your world and it's your will.

Your colouring techniques churn out works as beautiful as ever, although I'm gonna have to be a bit mean to say that it's, frankly, not really something I'll say "oooh" at.

How about filling in the blanks that I didn't quite answer? Don't let my remarks kill you or something, although I'm sure I worry too much ^_^!